New technology
Walking around the beach, looking at the garbage on the sand. I asked the man in charge of the garbage. "What are the bins for," I questioned the man.
"Putting garbage in," he replied.
"Then why is there so much garbage on the beach," I asked him, he didn't answer.
"Humans waste so much," he nodded.
We have new technology these six new green garbage cans, will pick up garbage by their self by using sensors. I saw them work at the beach, it looked new again.
Creative story, with a little bit of a meaning. The only thing is when you say munch, spelling error?
ReplyDeleteAlso your'e story doesn't really flow so maybe add some commas.
Cool story! But you might want to see if it can flow more because in some spots it's a bit choppy.
ReplyDeleteAlso the end it a bit boring you could see if you could put more umph into it and spice it up a bit!
DeleteMaybe you could change 'I asked him' to 'I inquired' to make your sentence stronger. I'm just a bit confused with the ending of your story. I also like the meaning of your story.
ReplyDeleteI think you could add a little bit more in about the garbage cans because it barely talks about them.
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